Saturday, April 27, 2013

teaser trailer

Here's your first official peek at "Sleepwalkers" - which, of course, I'm still writing and revising. But I'm happy enough with what I have that I don't mind sharing the first scene with you. I'll probably still give it another polish before posting, but it's almost where I want it; and I think it's hot enough to whet your appetites for the rest.

Feel free to make any comments you like below, or ask me any questions about the world I'm creating here. In case you haven't noticed, I've set up my blog to allow for totally anonymous comments, and I'll never delete anything that isn't spam or trolling. So jump on in if you like! Now's your chance to offer feedback on a story in progress.

by thrall

synopsis: The battle for an empire grows desperate after a leading Resistance figure is brainwashed.

color code: purple
story codes: mc, nc, md, fd, mf, ff, mm, ma, sf, ex, ft


Note 1: If you are under eighteen years of age, this story is not for you. Go away.

Note 2: Thanks to Lady K, the friendly neighborhood orc, and Callidus for helping me brainstorm, proofread, and generally make sure the volume was turned up to 11.

Note 3: This is not a stroke story. It’s an X-rated novella with plenty of sex. If stroke is what you’re after, save yourself some time and bail out now.


Part 1 of 11

Despite himself, Paul couldn't stop staring at the Peacekeeper. He knew it was safe enough to *look* at them, though not to touch; but free citizens avoided attention from the General’s forces as much as possible. The less they noticed you, the less likely you were to become one of them.

Paul couldn't help staring at this sleepwalker, though. The private stood just a few feet away, facing him across the narrow aisle of a crowded monorail. Her body swayed slightly with the movement of the car and her chest moved with her breath, but otherwise she was still as a mannequin.

Even her skin seemed molded from plastic, since her armor was as clear and polished as glass almost everywhere. But Paul knew it was flexible and porous; the diamondoid fibers were just too small for him to see. He also knew the suit could have been programmed to display any color or pattern the user desired, but General Hawthorne was the real user here, and she desired her slaves to appear naked. The private’s d-suit clung to her body like a glaze, showing off her perfectly sculpted muscles, her total lack of hair, and her tattoo.

The tattoo, her mark of ownership, hung just above her left eye. At its uppermost point was the crest of her prime, a free-minded member of the General’s Cabinet. That Cab had imprinted a sleepwalker who’d imprinted another sleepwalker, and so on down the chain to this poor private. Counting the number of gray bars below her crest, Paul could see that she was a Level Seven. Each intermediate imprinter between a sleepwalker and their prime represented a loss of initiative, functionality, and selfhood; and this private had seven intermediaries. That made her little more than an automaton.

At the bottom of the private’s tattoo was her serial number, riding just above the brow line. Below that was the only part of her armor that wasn’t soft and transparent: her faceplate. It was the color of brushed steel, and it curved outward just enough to give her the appearance of facelessness; but it, too, was diamondoid. It was also perfectly breathable.

Paul watched the movement of the private’s chest, noting how the late-afternoon light made it glisten. Whatever identifying marks she’d once possessed, they’d been erased by the Empire. Then her body had been toned and sculpted and augmented into this…thing. This sexualized, depersonalized threat of what could happen to Paul, or to Shara, or to anyone else they cared about – at any time.

Even if Paul could have pulled his gaze from the Peacekeeper’s body, he still wouldn’t have seen her eyes. That, too, was a threat. Any time a Peacemaker was around – and they were always around – you could never be sure they weren’t watching you. It didn’t even matter if you were a loyal bootlicker who never even *thought* about the Resistance. No one was safe but the narcs, and they had to buy immunity in installments. If they waited too long to rat someone else, they were just as vulnerable to snatching as anyone else.

The Peacekeepers didn’t even care what skills you had. When Paul was a kid, one of the bag boys at his local supermarket had been snatched and no one ever found out why. No one ever saw him again, either, since sleepwalkers were never returned to their old neighborhoods. If they had been returned, some loved one would have tried to rescue them. That never ended well for anyone.

Paul still wondered about that bag boy sometimes: why he’d been taken and what had been done to him. Probably he’d just had some scrap of information the Empire wanted, and once they extracted it from him they’d shipped him off to Greenland or somewhere as a Peacekeeper private.

You never knew, though. Maybe the General liked ginger bed boys, or maybe she had some other use for him. Not every sleepwalker became a Peacekeeper, and even Paul didn’t know all their possible uses.

He just knew more than most. That was the second reason he couldn’t stop staring at the private. *One day soon*, he told her silently, *I’m going to save you*.

Even as Paul thought it, the Peacekeeper turned her head downward as though she were looking at him. He blushed and tried to think about breasts, only breasts. A sleepwalker at her level couldn’t read expressions in the traditional sense, but she’d be implanted with ‘ware that could gauge the dilation of his pupils and the activity of his sweat glands. Maybe she’d already seen enough to make her suspicious. God, maybe she was beaming a report to her supervisors right now.

No, dammit, Paul was working himself up over nothing. The Peacekeepers’ role was mainly to intimidate. They didn’t snatch many people overall, and they left ordinary policework to the civilian force. Besides, a private was little more than a sophisticated video camera. Paul wasn’t in any danger…yet.

He had to calm down, had to distract himself. He forced his eyes lower, to the lacquered rose between the Peacekeeper’s legs, and they flushed just like his face. She wanted him to look. She *liked* it.

Despite himself, Paul did, too.


As Paul stepped out of the car, the private turned her head slightly, tracking him just a little longer with her eyes.

Peacekeepers were a common sight in the Empire. Anyone who displeased the General or her subordinates, or anyone they’d finished using, could be turned out onto the streets with guns in their fingertips and just enough initiative to storm a rebel cell – with direction from higher-ranking Peacekeepers, anyway. The privates almost *were* security cameras, and just about that common.

It made for the perfect camouflage.

The private logged onto the Peacekeeper comms network and beamed a message to another private standing around the corner: “Subject Paul Medina leaving Blue Line car 135, heading south by foot toward residence.”

Her assignment completed, the first private transferred surveillance to the second one and returned to standby mode.

Saturday, April 13, 2013

Guest poster Lady K weighs in again on "Sleepwalkers"

First, a very brief update of my own regarding my upcoming novella...which, I think, is probably technically a novel by now. It's grown to 11 chapters, but thankfully, that's the final count. Yes, I'm certain. I'm down to the final scene now - although there's still lots of polishing to do before I'm ready to post anything. But it's hilarious to look back at the older entries I made about the story and to see how I kept revising my estimations about the length. My original idea was that it would be a whopping six chapters!  Anyway, I'm still shooting for posting the Chapter 1 on the EMCSA in about two months, give or take; and I'll post at least part of it on my blog much sooner than that.

In the meantime, here's a totally unbiased take on what I've done so far (And if you believe that, I have a lovely non-Euclidean bridge to sell you). Lady K continues to be my faithful beta reader, and I've asked her to write another update for you all. This is her response.

Greetings, readers of thrall's blog. This is Lady K, thrall's friend and fellow devotee of fine MC erotica. How did we meet, you ask? None of your damn business and I'll thank you not to be so nosy. :-)

This is another update on the progress of thrall's MC novella, "Sleepwalkers." thrall asked me to write this earlier in the week and if I'm honest, it's not been the easiest request to fulfill. That's because there's only so much I can tell you without ruining the story and that's the last thing I want to do. You see, this is seriously good stuff. I'm not just saying that because thrall's my friend, either. If it sucked, I'd tell her. It would be hard but I'd do it.

However, after some reflection I've come up with a few tidbits I feel safe letting you in on.
  1. This story is very hot. "Duh, Lady K," I hear you say. "This is thrall's MC erotica, I'd expect no less." Fair enough but you didn't let me finish. thrall has managed to do something I didn't think was possible. "Sleepwalkers" is a science fiction MC novella set in a dystopian future. thrall has managed to take the induction method used by the bad guys and keep it fresh and hot for induction after induction. This is not easy to do and it's why we authors normally change the inductions around a bit. thrall has done it and done it nicely.
  2. This is a fully-realized science fiction universe. Most writers of erotica pay a touch of lip service to the setting and get right to the inductions. thrall has thought out the setting in fine detail. I'm very proud of her.
  3. This is not a stroke piece. I know I said this before in my first update but this can't be said enough. If your looking for a quick piece to jack or jill off to, keep looking.
Well, that's it readers. Anything more would spoil the story. "Sleepwalkers" is thrall's finest work yet. I'm sure you'll agree when she unveils it.

May you find the benevolent (or not-so-benevolent) mind controller of your dreams.
Lady K

Saturday, April 6, 2013

Ode to crap

For the past few weeks I've been trawling YouTube, lookinbg for videos of songs I enjoyed in the 1980's. Sometimes the music holds up, but the videos are almost uniformly awful. Take, for instance, the one below: "Mr. Roboto" by Styx. Right here in one tidy little package is everything that was wrong with the '80's pop/rock zeitgeist. I don't even have to make a list of the atrocities. If you're brave enough to watch for yourself, you'll catch them on your own.

So why am I posting the thing here? Because it typifies something else that many of you can relate to. When I was a teenager coming to grips with my fetish, shit like this was hot to me. It made me squirm, half happily and half uncomfortably, because it felt so weird to be turned on by something this - let's face it - dumb. I was especially uncomfortable watching robot or MC material with anyone else around. It was like having one of those "naked in public" dreams. I got the same sensation watching Dance Fever (part of my weekly Saturday night routine) whenever anyone did The Robot, or with Superfriends, or dozens of other totally innocuous TV shows and movie scenes.

So this post is really about nostalgia, and how much tougher things were for my generation. This is my version of "When I was a kid, I had to walk ten miles to school every day. In the snow. Uphill. Both ways." It's also a good opportunity to fantasize that the segment beginning at 4:20 ends differently, and/or to laugh at the suggestion of male cameltoe.